“A new municipal government, set up under Allied military Government direction, had gone to work at last in the city hall. Citizens who has recovered from various degrees of radiation sickness were coming back by the thousand-by November 1st, the population, mostly crowded into the outskirts, was already 137,000, more than a third of the wartime peak-and the government set in motion all kinds of projects to put them to work rebuilding the city. It hired men to clear the streets, and others to gather scrap iron, which they sorted and piled in mountains opposite to the city hall. Some returning residents were putting up their own shanties and huts, and planting small squares of winter wheat besides them, but the city also authorized and built four hundred one-family “barracks.” Utilities were repaired-electric lights shone again, trams started running, and employees of the water works fixed seventy thousand leaks in mains and plumbing. A planning conference, with an enthusiastic young military Government officer, Lieutenant John D. Montgomery, of Kalamazoo, as it adviser, began to consider what sort of city the new Hiroshima should be. The ruined city had flourished- and had been an inviting target- mainly because it had been one of the most important military-command and communications center in Japan, and would have become the imperial headquarters had the islands been invaded and Tokyo captured. Now there would be no huge military establishments to help revive the city. The planning conference, at a loss as to just what importance Hiroshima could have, fell back on rather vague cultural and paving projects. It drew maps with avenues and hundred yards wide and thought seriously of erecting a group of buildings as a monument to the disaster, and naming them the institute of international Amity. Statistical workers gathered what figures they could on the effects of the bomb. They reported that 78,150 people had been killed.13, 983 were missing, and 37,425 had been injured. No one in the city government pretended that these figures were accurate-though the Americans accepted them as official- and as the months went by and more and more hundreds of corpses were dug up from the ruins, and as the number of unclaimed urns of ashes at the Zempoji Temple in Koi rose into the thousand, the statisticians began to say that at least a hundred thousand people had lost their lives in the bombing. Since many people died in a combination of causes, it was impossible to figure exactly how many were killed by each cause, but the statisticians calculated that about twenty-five percent had died of direct burns from the bomb, about fifty percent from other injuries, and about twenty percent as a result of radiation effects. The statisticians’ figures on property damaged were more reliable: Sixty-two thousand out of ninety thousand buildings destroyed, and sixty thousand more damaged beyond repair. In the heart of the city, they found only five modern buildings that could be use again without major repairs. This small number was by no means the fault of flimsy Japanese construction. In fact, since 1923 earthquake, Japanese building regulations had requires that the roof of each large building be able to bear a minimum load of seventy pounds per square foot, whereas American regulations do not normally specify more than forty pounds per square foot.” (Heresey, 1985, pp. 80, 81)
Could this paragraph be divided into a three small paragraphs?
Could this paragraph be divided into a three small paragraphs?
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I think this paragraph can be divided in three smaller paragraphs. When the author stars talking about the planning conference, “A planning conference, with an enthusiastic young military Government officer…,” we can see that he finishes one idea and he start talking about a different one; however, this new one is still connected to the earliest one. Here we can divide the paragraph. Then we can see how he goes to another idea when he stars talking about statistics, “Statistical workers gathered what figures they could on the effects of the bomb…,” he finish the subject about the rebuilding of Hiroshima and star talking about statistics of the people who died and got injured and the damages because the bomb, that is why we can divide the paragraph again. So at the end we will have three smaller paragraphs from one big paragraph.
(The recovered people start to move back to Hiroshima, begin to repair the damaged buildings and clear up the streets.)
First paragraph: “A new municipal government, set up under Allied military Government direction, had gone to work at last in the city hall. Citizens who has recovered from various degrees of radiation sickness were coming back by the thousand-by November 1st, the population, mostly crowded into the outskirts, was already 137,000, more than a third of the wartime peak-and the government set in motion all kinds of projects to put them to work rebuilding the city. It hired men to clear the streets, and others to gather scrap iron, which they sorted and piled in mountains opposite to the city hall. Some returning residents were putting up their own shanties and huts, and planting small squares of winter wheat besides them, but the city also authorized and built four hundred one-family “barracks.” Utilities were repaired-electric lights shone again, trams started running, and employees of the water works fixed seventy thousand leaks in mains and plumbing.”
(The planning conference wonders what Hiroshima will become in the future, and set up a plan to revive the city.)
Second paragraph: “A planning conference, with an enthusiastic young military Government officer, Lieutenant John D. Montgomery, of Kalamazoo, as it adviser, began to consider what sort of city the new Hiroshima should be. The ruined city had flourished- and had been an inviting target- mainly because it had been one of the most important military-command and communications center in Japan, and would have become the imperial headquarters had the islands been invaded and Tokyo captured. Now there would be no huge military establishments to help revive the city. The planning conference, at a loss as to just what importance Hiroshima could have, fell back on rather vague cultural and paving projects. It drew maps with avenues and hundred yards wide and thought seriously of erecting a group of buildings as a monument to the disaster, and naming them the institute of international Amity.”
(The third and the fourth paragraph could be stayed in one paragraph. Because of long paragraph, I decide to break into two paragraphs, so the reader could easily understand.)
Third paragraph: “Statistical workers gathered what figures they could on the effects of the bomb. They reported that 78,150 people had been killed.13, 983 were missing, and 37,425 had been injured. No one in the city government pretended that these figures were accurate-though the Americans accepted them as official- and as the months went by and more and more hundreds of corpses were dug up from the ruins, and as the number of unclaimed urns of ashes at the Zempoji Temple in Koi rose into the thousand, the statisticians began to say that at least a hundred thousand people had lost their lives in the bombing. Since many people died in a combination of causes, it was impossible to figure exactly how many were killed by each cause, but the statisticians calculated that about twenty-five percent had died of direct burns from the bomb, about fifty percent from other injuries, and about twenty percent as a result of radiation effects.”
Fourth paragraph: “The statisticians’ figures on property damaged were more reliable: Sixty-two thousand out of ninety thousand buildings destroyed, and sixty thousand more damaged beyond repair. In the heart of the city, they found only five modern buildings that could be use again without major repairs. This small number was by no means the fault of flimsy Japanese construction. In fact, since 1923 earthquake, Japanese building regulations had requires that the roof of each large building be able to bear a minimum load of seventy pounds per square foot, whereas American regulations do not normally specify more than forty pounds per square foot.”
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