“The Society of Jesus ha been the first institution to build a relative permanent shanty in the ruins of Hiroshima. That had been while Father Kleinsorge was in the hospital. As soon as he got back, he began living in the shack, and he an another priest, Father Lederman, who had joined him in the mission, arranged for the purchase of three of the standardized “barracks,” which the city was selling at seven thousand yen a piece. They put two together, end to end, and made a pretty chapel of them; they ate in the third. When materials were available, they commissioned a contractor to build a three-story mission house exactly like the one that had been destroyed in the fire. In the compound, carpenters cut timbers, gouged mortises, shaped tenons whittled scores of wooden pegs and bores holes for them, until all the parts for the house were in a neat pile; then, in three days they put the whole thing together, like an Oriental puzzle, without any nails at all. Father Kleinsorge was finding it hard, as Dr. Fujii had suggested he would, to be cautions and to take his naps. He went out every day on foot to call on Japanese Catholics and prospective converts. As the months went by, he grew more and more tired. In June, he read an article in the Hiroshima chugoku warning survivors against working too hard-but what could he do? By July, he was worn out, and early August, almost exactly on the anniversary of the bombing, he went back to the Catholic international hospital, in Tokyo, for a month’s rest.” (Hersey, 1985, p. 85)
Could this paragraph be divided in two smaller paragraphs?
Could this paragraph be divided in two smaller paragraphs?
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This paragraph can be break in two smaller paragraphs. The author stars talking about the Society of Jesus and how they rebuilt their chapel and house, then, he stars talking about Father Kleinsorge’s damaged health “Father Kleinsorge was finding it hard, as Dr. Fujii had suggested he would…” Here in this transition we can break it and like this is how we divide the paragraph in two smaller paragraphs.
I think this paragraph could be divided into two paragraphs. This first smaller paragraph is “The Society of Jesus…without any mails at all.” This smaller paragraph is talk about how Father Kleinsorge rebuilds their mission house. The second small paragraph is “Father Kleinsorge was finding it hard…for a month’s rest. This smaller paragraph is talk about the Father Kleinsorge’s situation. Therefore, this paragraph could be divided into two smaller paragraphs.
Well, this comment summarizes the idea of the two smaller paragraphs from the bigger one. I agree with him.
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